Opening Draft

What went well

We attempted to use are footage and created an introduction to engage audiences, The beginning music was integrated carefully and accurately, and we were successful in hiding the females identity.

Even better if

If you could hear the bullies voice whilst he was attacking the character it would have been clearer to understand, and clearer to hear, we attempted to make the audiences laugh using humour.

Improvements

Firstly, more shots are needed of the female walking in different angles, to make it easier for audiences to focus on her rather then focusing on the scenery of the school, we must make sure that there is not litter in any of the scenes whilst recording, we must be very careful with detail ensuring that every thing that is captured in the scene is perfect, if it is not more attention will be drawn to the imperfection of the scene making it easier for audiences to lose focus. We need to research effective comedy a scene, especially bullying, as that scene was unsuccessful in making audiences laugh, that scene has to be funny so it builds suspense to the following comedic act. In addition we need to make sure that once the female walks into the common room that its tidy and also that the right music is played to set the theme, at the moment because of lack of footage it was harder to determine the theme or the mood set by the action of characters as we didn’t have the best possible footage. I think these improvements are realistic and we will be able to achieve them, however, I do not think they will be accomplished before the half term due to difficulties with shooting.